F3 Cycle 52 – Old Folks in New Cars by guest David Barber

Posted by on October 7, 2011 Leave a comment (31) Go to comments

Thank you for asking me to contribute this weeks challenge, Tommy.  I’m humbled and honoured. Right, let’s go…

I had a nightmare of a morning today. I’m working in a small village that has terrible network signals. So, what happened that’s so bad? My car dies on me. Shit! There’s nobody about so I manage to push my car into a small carpark and then wander about trying to find a modicum of signal on my mobile. I eventually do and the rescue services are on their way. I have to wait in my car, which isn’t a chore as where I was is overlooking a Loch and the scenery is great.

A car then pulls up beside me and the occupants just sit there. I’m intrigued. Not a word passes between them. This is where you come in. Forget my back story, I just want to know the story of the people in the car. What are they up to? What have they done? Where have they been? You get the idea.

Any genre. 750 words max.

Bio:
David Barber was born and bred in Manchester, England, but now lives in Crieff, Scotland with his wife, Lisa, and their two daughters. He has been published on numerous e-zines, including Thriller, Killers ‘n’ Chillers, A Twist of Noir, The New Flesh and Blink Ink. He is currently working on a few projects including a novel. He is the editor of The Flash Fiction Offensive and can be found lurking at http://davidbarberfiction.blogspot.com

Cue: Tell the tale of two people pulling up in a car to a remote lake.

Length: 750 words max

Genre: open

Deadline: Wednesday 9pm EST October 12th, 2011

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  • http://twitter.com/LucaVeste Luca Veste

    I’m in. Great prompt. 

  • SueH

    We could have easily been said couple this morning – having just done my back in before I climbed into the car I don’t think I could repeat the conversation! But I’ll try and think of something….

    • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

      Would love to read something from you, Sue… I know you’ve been so busy and all.  I do love your writing!

  • Rosalind Nazilli

    Loving it…x

  • http://www.pluckyoutoo.com Thomas Pluck

    I’m in. I love how we underestimate old people.

  • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

    I would so love to do a story on this prompt… just don’t know… so much going on right now… we will have to see…

  • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

    I’m going to hate myself in the morning, I just know it… but, I am in!  I kept looking at this picture… I have to do this!  :)

  • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

    Okay… I was wrong… I didn’t hate myself this morning (yeah, you go ahead and analyze that, Dr. Kay!  Lol!).  It must have been the Nyquil!  *wink*

    My story is done… I just need a picture.  I really like the one you posted for David (hands off, Veronica!  Go find your own!)  Hehe.
    This is a really terrific prompt, David…. Thank you so much!!  I can’t wait to read everyone’s stories.

  • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

    Here is my story… THE DINNER GUEST.  For my WordPress friends….

    http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/2011/10/09/flash-fiction-friday-%E2%80%93-f3-%E2%80%93-cycle-52-%E2%80%93-old-folks-in-new-cars-the-dinner-guest/

    And, for those on Blogger….

    http://veronicathepajamathief.blogspot.com/2011/10/flash-fiction-friday-f3-cycle-5-old.html

    Looking forward to reading everyone’s stories.  Okay… back to my outline.  See you all Friday!  Happy writing!

    • Rosalind Nazilli

      Exellent.. Well done you..xx

  • SueH

    OK – done and dusted and up for inspection!

    The Anniversary

    • Rosalind Nazilli

      Beautiful…  Great minds think alike to a certain extent..xx

      • SueH

        Thankyou! (And yes – I recognise a similarity ;-) )

  • Rosalind Nazilli

    http://rosiesmith-nazilliwrites.blogspot.com/2011/10/f3-cycle-52-remember-yesterday.html

    That’s me done as well..  Well infact I was a good few hours ago but the electricity has been off for three hours….

    Apologies in advance for the unsightly mess but having difficulty pasting into my Blog today for some reason

    • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

      I LOVED your story, Rosalind… it had me bawling most of the way through… sad, yet so beautifully written!  

      An amazing love story… this really touched my heart!  <3

  • http://www.writingsimplified.com Carmen Seitan

    Oooh! I really like this prompt! I’ve got my draft done, now I just have to edit it. I’ll have it posted sometime tomorrow :) .

  • http://veronicathepajamathief.wordpress.com/ Veronica Marie Lewis-Shaw

    I see some great stories this week!  I will come back around Friday and comment everybody’s.

    Thanks again for the great prompt, David!

  • Glen

    Pretty much ready on this – should be posted tomorrow :-)   nice prompt, certainly gave me ideas and as for Veronica, Sue & Rosalind – well!  impressive work ladies.

    • Rosalind Nazilli

      Thanks Glen..  I tried to reply on my blog but couldn’t for some reason.  It always plays up..x

  • Glen

    Damn – I just re-read the cue…   I thought I was writing a story inspired by the photo, I didn’t spot the bit about telling the story about them at the lake.

    Do I need to rewrite or will a story about the two people in the car cover it do you think? I haven’t mentioned any lakes!

    • Glen

      It’s okay – I think I’ve sorted it, You can barely see the join where I’ve bolted on some extra story! The main part of the story may not technically be set at the lake – but it does answer the question about why they were there – I think?!

  • Beach Bum
    • SueH

      ….and what a beaut it is, too! ;-p

    • Rosalind Nazilli

      That is something else..x

  • http://www.pluckyoutoo.com Thomas Pluck
    • Rosalind Nazilli

      Fantastic..  Really enjoyed it.

  • http://www.writingsimplified.com Carmen Seitan

    Here’s mine! It’s “Birthright” by Carmen Seitan http://www.writingsimplified.com/2011/10/flash-fiction-friday-birthright.html  .  After looking at a few other entries, I think I may have misinterpreted the prompt to be only about 2 people pulling up to a lake in a car instead of 2 elderly people pulling up to a lake in a car. Oops!

  • Michael Williams

    Walter and Edna at the Lake
     a love story   http://bit.ly/niD7Y4

  • Glen

    Carefully stitched together, you can hardly see the join!  —       I hope you like it  

    The Light Within  –  http://www.glenslife.com/2011/10/light-within.html

    • Rosalind Nazilli

      Incredibly clever.. naughty boy..xx

  • http://profiles.google.com/jinjokage Charles Singletary

    I rushed a bit on this one….I think it came out decent enough though :/.

    The Outsider

    http://writingrighter.blogspot.com/2011/10/outsider.html